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WhisperJet
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My English

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Gentlemen,

I am turning to you Englishmen with a rather special request today - I have to write a small copy text for a print ad presenting our fine little radio station here. And I have to do it in English which makes me shiver a bit. As a lector for these two lines would be far too complicated - may I ask for your kind support?

For hundreds of years Vienna is serving the world with the finest masterpieces of classical music. Today the web enables you to savour this heritage – wherever you are and whenever you like. Radio S offers you a free premium programme of classical music from all periods – all year long and straight from the heart of where music lives.
Vienna’s classical music station.
At your service. Worldwide.


Any major mistakes, faults or problems...? :hide:

Many thanks in advance for your support
and best wishes,

Nick
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Goodness me, Nick, of all the boards to chose for advice on English grammar... :lol: :lol: :lol:

My only comment is on your first sentence which would be more colloquial if you replaced For hundreds of years Vienna is serving the world with the finest masterpieces with For hundreds of years Vienna has been serving the world with the finest masterpieces . Other than that it looks fine to me.

We must chat about radio stations by PM some time.
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I agree absolutely with PeteP's amendment to the first sentence. In all other respects it is fine

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Looks purty dang good to me. :cheers:

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Yep :agree:

I agree with Petes' amendment .....otherwise fine :thumbsup:
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PeteP wrote:Goodness me, Nick, of all the boards to chose for advice on English grammar... :lol: :lol: :lol:
...I trust aviation people first! :lol: :lol: B-) B-)

Many great thanks for your help, gentlemen!
Makes me sleep better! :Dance:

All the best from the heart of where music lives (which in this case is next to St. Stephen's Cathedral),

Nick
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As a native Dane, I can confirm that the amendments are indeed correct .... :thumbsup:
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yup agreed Has been serving or Has served

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Again, thank you very much for your fast response and all the help! :thumbsup: :)

Cheers & all the best from VIE,

Nick
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